专题16 记叙文写人
第一部分:文体认知与写作原则
人物描写主要是介绍人物的外貌、生平、成就等。人物描写的体裁一般是记叙文,有时也以看图作文、
表格、书信、新闻的形式出现。
1. 写作目的:通过讲述关于某个人物的具体事件,运用生动细节和恰当描写,塑造一个鲜活、立体的人
物形象,并表达某种情感(如敬佩、感激、思念)或阐明一个道理。
2. 核心要素:
· 人物鲜明:通过外貌、语言、动作、心理、神态等描写让人物“活”起来。
· 事件典型:选择1-2 件最能体现人物品质或特点的典型事件。
· 细节生动:少用概括性语言,多用具体细节打动阅卷老师。
· 情感真挚:情感抒发要自然,源于事件和细节,避免空洞喊话。
· 结构完整:开头引入、主体叙事、结尾升华,缺一不可。
第二部分:万能写作模板
模板一:经典三段式
Paragraph 1: 引入人物 & 点明主题
Among the people I admire, ... (人物,如 my father, Ms. Wang, an elderly neighbor) is the one who
has influenced me most profoundly. The memory of how he/she... (核心事件概括) remains vividly etched
in my mind.
【译文】:在我敬佩的人中,……(人物)是影响我最深远的一个。关于他/她如何……(核心事件概
括)的记忆,依然清晰地烙印在我的脑海里。
Paragraph 2: 叙述事件 & 塑造形象 (核心段落)
It was a ... (天气/背景) day. I vividly remember that... (事件起因). Seeing this, ... (人物) didn't hesitate
for a second. He/She... (人物的具体动作和语言). His/Her eyes were filled with... (神态描写). At that
moment, I was deeply moved by his/her... (品质,如 kindness, determination). What impressed me even
more was that... (事件的进一步发展或另一个细节).
【译文】:那是一个……(天气/背景)的日子。我清晰地记得……(事件起因)。看到这一幕,……
(人物)没有丝毫犹豫。他/她……(人物的具体动作和语言)。他/她的眼神充满了……(神态描写)。
写作指导
识
在那一刻,我被他/她的……(品质)深深打动了。让我印象更深刻的是……(事件的进一步发展或另一
个细节)。
Paragraph 3: 总结感悟 & 升华主题
This experience, though seemingly small, taught me a valuable lesson about... (道理,如 the power of
persistence, the warmth of kindness). ... (人物) is not only a ... (身份) to me, but also a guiding star
that illuminates my path forward.
【译文】:这次经历,虽然看似微小,却教会了我关于……(道理)的宝贵一课。……(人物)对我而
言,不仅是……(身份),更是一颗指引我前进道路的启明星。
模板二:万能模板
On the path of pursuing knowledge, numerous people we have encountered may have a lifelong impact
on us, and even contribute to shaping who we are. Among all the people in my life, the one that impresses me
most is …….
…… was born in ……, ……. At the age of ……,she graduated from …… University. She is a good-
looking ……- year-old girl,who has a pretty face and always wears a bright smile. As our ……,…… sets a good
example. She is an enthusiastic fan of science and has made some creative inventions. What impresses me most is
that she is always ready to help others when they meet with difficulties. …… is so good a person that she is highly
thought of by all the people around her.
Her dedication to work and to people is admirable, which truly inspires me to become a person like her
in the future.
第三部分:人物描写核心素材库
1. 外貌描写
· 通用:He/She has a warm and friendly smile that can light up the entire room. (他/她有一个温暖友好
的微笑,能照亮整个房间。)
· 眼睛:His/Her eyes sparkled with wisdom and kindness. (他/她的眼睛里闪烁着智慧与友善的光芒。)
· 面容:Wrinkles etched at the corners of his/her eyes, telling stories of a life full of laughter and
hardship. (岁月在他/她的眼角刻下了皱纹,诉说着充满欢笑与艰辛的一生。)
· 手:His/Her hands were rough from years of hard work, yet they were always gentle. (他/她的手因长
年劳作而粗糙,但却总是那么温柔。)
2. 动作描写
· 耐心:She patiently explained the complex concept to me again and again until I fully understood. (她
耐心地一遍遍向我解释那个复杂的概念,直到我完全理解。)
· 坚定:Without a word, he bent down and picked up the litter, setting a perfect example for all of us.
(他一句话也没说,弯下腰捡起了垃圾,为我们所有人树立了完美的榜样。)
· 轻柔:She gently patted my shoulder, offering me silent comfort and encouragement. (她轻轻地拍了拍
我的肩膀,给予我无声的安慰和鼓励。)
3. 语言描写
· 鼓励:"Don't be afraid to make mistakes," he often said, "that's how we learn and grow." (“别害怕
犯错,”他常说,“这正是我们学习和成长的方式。”)
· 智慧:"The beauty of life," she reminded me, "lies not in never falling, but in rising every time we
fall." (“生活的美好,”她提醒我,“不在于从未跌倒,而在于每次跌倒后都能爬起来。”)
· 关爱:"Remember, I'm always here for you," her words warmed my heart and gave me strength.
(“记住,我永远在这里支持你,”她的话温暖了我的心,给了我力量。)
4. 神态与心理描写 (用于自己的感受,侧面烘托人物)
· A sense of admiration welled up inside me. (一股敬佩之情在我心中油然而生。)
· I was deeply touched by his selfless act. (我被他无私的行为深深打动了。)
· All my anxiety melted away the moment I saw her reassuring smile. (一看到她令人安心的微笑,我所
有的焦虑都烟消云散了。)
第四部分:高分亮句 & 升级技巧
1. 开头句升级:
· 平淡:I want to talk about my teacher.
· 高分:If I were to describe the person who has shaped my character the most, it would undoubtedly
be my English teacher, Ms. Li. (如果要形容那个对我性格塑造影响最大的人,那无疑是我的英语老师,
李老师。)
2. 衔接词升级:
· 用 Furthermore, What's more 替代 Also。
· 用 Nevertheless, Despite this 替代 But。
· 用 Eventually, Consequently 替代 So。
3. 结尾句升级:
· 平淡:I like him very much.
· 高分:His/Her influence has become an integral part of who I am today. (他/她的影响已经成为了今日
之我不可或缺的一部分。)
· 更高分:Although time may pass and circumstances may change, the lessons I learned from him/her
will forever be the beacon that guides me through the darkness. (纵然时光流逝,境遇变迁,从他/她身
上学到的道理将永远是指引我穿越黑暗的明灯。)
温馨提示:
1. 确定核心品质:动笔前先想好,你要表现人物的哪种品质?(如:kind, brave, persistent, optimistic)
2. 围绕品质选事:选择的事件必须能有力地支撑这个核心品质。
3. 多用描写,少用概括:把“他很善良”变成“他蹲下身,用纸巾轻轻擦去流浪猫脸上的污垢”。
4. 检查时态:记叙文主要使用一般过去时。
【2023 年全国甲卷】以英语讲述中国故事为主题的征文活动,请以一位中国历史人物为题写一篇短文投
稿,内容包括:
1. 人物事迹;2. 意义;3. 启示。
注意:
1. 词数100 左右;
2. 可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。
(2020·全国·高考真题)你校正在组织英语作文比赛。请以身边值得尊敬和爱戴的人为题,写一篇短文参
赛,内容包括:
1. 人物简介;
2. 尊敬和爱戴的原因。
注意:
1. 词数100 左右;
2. 短文题目和首句已为你写好。
(23-24 高二上·广东揭阳·阶段练习)假如你是李华,你的外国朋友Jack 得知屠呦呦获得诺贝尔生理学或
医学奖的消息,因此对其产生了浓厚的兴趣,想了解屠呦呦的生平及成就。请你给他写一封回信,内容
包括:
1. 1930 年出身于浙江省宁波市;1951 年考入北京大学医学部并于1955 年毕业;
2. 2015 年10 月,因发现青蒿素这一治疗疟疾的新药物而获诺贝尔生理学或医学奖。
3. 屠呦呦是第一位获得诺贝尔科学奖项的中国科学家。
参考词汇:青蒿素:artemisinin; 疟疾:malaria; 诺贝尔生理学或医学奖:Nobel Prize in Physiology or
Medicine
注意:
1.词数80 左右,开头与结尾已为你写好,不计入总词数内;
2.可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。
(24-25 高二下·湖北武汉·期中)假定你班英语课开展“我所崇拜的科学家(The Scientist I Admire)”
为主题的项目学习活动。请你写一篇发言稿,代表你们小组介绍你们所崇拜的科学家,内容包括:
1.主要成就;
2.崇拜原因。
注意:
1.写作词数应为80 左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡相应位置作答。
(24-25 高二上·浙江杭州·期末)假设你是李华,你校英文报“名人风采”栏目征稿,请你用英语写一篇
短文投稿,介绍一位你最敬佩的科学家,要点包括:
1.人物简介
2.敬佩理由
注意:
1.写作词数应为80 个左右:
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
The Scientist I Admire Most