安阳市26 届高三调研考试
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短
文。
As far as I was concerned , life experiences that taught me a lesson were not
my cup of tea. I had never concerned myself with going out to strange places or
meeting new people and learning about their cultures(这就是提示哦！~). That was how I
spent my life till that day when something completely unexpected occurred. And I
never thought that I needed to make a change.
I was in high school and as expected, I was miles away from social activities and
organized sports(伏笔). I had some interest in swimming and I could have done well,
but I was shy and did not consider it a rewarding experience within my comfort
zone though
the coach
asked me to try
swimming many times
(伏笔).
Before that experience, I always thought that I was as strong as an ox(牛). Be
it summer or winter, I could tolerate anything. One day I returned from school and
felt a pain in my stomach. I drank plenty of water and even took some medicine to
relieve the pain, but none of these worked.Therefore , my mother decided to drive
me to hospital. When we reached
the hospital
, I was silently crying with pain. After
I got out of our car and sat down in the wheelchair, I was feeling like a had a feeling
that something was going to happen(同位从).
A doctor came and she asked me to point with my finger at where it hurt.I did
and she touched the place and then asked the nurse for scans! Later, it turned out to
be appendicitis(阑尾炎). I could not believe it, I was strong and could ward off any
disease with a smile. How could that happen to me? I felt helpless and weak and that
was most disturbing for me. Till the
operation
, I was only getting fluids. I asked
the nurse when I would be able to eat burgers and fries. She smiled and promised
me that it wouldn't take long.
意:1.续写词数应为150 左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: I was wheeled into the operating room the next day.
Paragraph 2: When I finally returned home, I made a decision to,change.
安阳市26 届高三调研考试
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短
文。
As far as I was concerned , life experiences that taught me a lesson were not my
cup of tea.had never concerned myself with going out to strange places or meeting
new people and learning about their cultures. That was how I spent my life till that
day when something completely .unexpected occurred . And I never thought that I
needed to make a change.I was in high school and as expected, I was miles away from
social activities and organized sports, I had some interest in' swimming and I could
have done well, but I was shy and did not consider it a rewarding experience within
my comfort zone though' the 'coach asked me to try swimming many times.
Before that experience, I always thought that I was as strong as an ox(牛). Be it
summer or winter, I could tolerate anything. One day I returned from school and felt a
pain in my stomach. I drank plenty of water and even took some medicine to relieve
the pain, but none of these worked.Therefore , my mother decided to 'drive me to
hospital. When we reached the hospital, I was silently crying with pain. After I got out
of our car and sat down in the wheelchair, I was feeling like a had a feeling that
something was going to happen.
A doctor came and she asked me to point with my finger at where it hurt.I did and
she touched the place and then asked the nurse for scans! Later, it turned out to be
appendicitis(阑尾炎). I could not believe it, I was strong and could ward off any
disease with a smile. How could that happen to me? I felt helpless and weak and that
was most disturbing for me.,Till the operation , I was only getting fluids( 流食). I
asked the nurse when I would be able to eat burgers and fries, She smiled and
promised me that it wouldn't take long.
意:1.续写词数应为150 左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: I was wheeled into the operating room the next day.
Paragraph 2: When I finally returned home, I made a decision to change.
一、读后续写类型分析
该文章属于个人成长与转变型读后续写。这类故事通常围绕主角经历一次
关键事件，从而突破自我、改变观念或行为。原文通过突发疾病（阑尾炎）打
破主角的舒适区，为后续的成长铺垫。
二、构思与布局
思路构思：
续写需聚焦主角从手术到康复的过程，以及如何通过此事件实现心理转变（如
克服害羞、尝试新事物）。
重点刻画主角的心理变化：从“抗拒改变”到“主动寻求成长”。
框架提炼：
第一段（手术过程）：描写手术中的恐惧、无助，以及医护人员的鼓励（可呼
应教练之前的邀请）。
第二段（康复与决心）：回家后的反思，决定突破舒适区（如加入游泳队），
并付诸行动。
实施要点：
保持原文第一人称视角和细腻的心理描写。
使用与原文一致的口语化语言（如“as strong as an ox”）。
衔接原文伏笔（如教练的邀请、对汉堡的渴望）。
三、故事山模式分析
阶段
原文内容
续写发展
开端
主角排斥新体验，舒适区固化
手术中的痛苦与恐惧
发展
突发疾病，被迫就医
手术过程及医护互动
高潮
确诊阑尾炎，心理崩溃
意识到脆弱，渴望改变
阶段
原文内容
续写发展
回落
接受流食，等待康复
回家后反思，制定改变计划
结局
无（待续写）
主动尝试游泳，突破自我
四、原文与续写的衔接点
分析角度
内容
原文反应句
人物刻画
主角内向、抗拒改变，但
内心渴望强大
“I was shy and did not consider it
a rewarding experience”
情感层次
从自信（“as strong as an
ox”）到无助（“felt
helpless and weak”）
“How could that happen to me?”
关键情节点
突发腹痛、确诊阑尾炎
“it turned out to be appendicitis”
语言特色
口语化、比喻修辞
“as strong as an ox”
关键词分析
“comfort
zone”“change”“rewarding
experience”
多次出现“comfort
zone”“change”
心理描写
对疾病的难以置信和脆弱
感
“I could not believe it... I felt
helpless and weak”
动作描写
指疼痛位置、坐轮椅、哭
泣
“point with my finger”“sat down
in the wheelchair”“crying with
pain”
环境描写
医院场景（扫描、轮椅）
“drive me to hospital”“nurse for
scans”
隐含主题
突破舒适区才能成长
“I never thought that I needed to
分析角度
内容
原文反应句
make a change”
情感转折
从抗拒到接受现实
“I was only getting fluids... She
smiled and promised”
空间转换
家→医院→手术室
“returned from school”“drive me
to hospital”“wheeled into
operating room”
时间过渡
从发病到手术前夜
“One day”“the next day”
五、伏笔与冲突点
伏笔：
教练多次邀请尝试游泳（暗示后续可能加入游泳队）。
对汉堡薯条的渴望（康复后可作为奖励场景）。
冲突点：
主角的自我认知（“强如牛”）与现实（突发疾病）的冲突。
舒适区与被迫改变的心理斗争。
隐含线索：
疾病象征“打破舒适区”的契机。
解决方案：
通过手术康复和后续主动尝试新事物（如游泳）实现成长。
六、续写注意事项
承接原文：
保留第一人称视角和心理描写风格。
呼应“汉堡”承诺（如康复后吃汉堡）。
提及教练之前的邀请（如决定联系教练加入游泳队）。
使用原文关键词（comfort zone, change, rewarding experience）。
巧妙设计：
手术中通过医生/护士的对话给予主角鼓励（如“坚强的人更需要勇敢尝
试”）。
回家后用具体行动体现改变（如主动给教练打电话）。
参考续写方向（简要）
Paragraph 1: 描写手术中的恐惧，但通过医护人员的安慰（如“你会好起
来的，就像游泳教练说的，你很有潜力”）获得勇气。
Paragraph 2: 回家后吃汉堡薯条时反思，决定联系教练加入游泳队，并描
述第一次训练的紧张与成就感。
七、 动作环境心理与高级词汇
动作描写
Her knees knocked together involuntarily.
她的膝盖不自觉地发抖。
A single bead of sweat traced a path down her temple.
一滴汗珠从她的太阳穴滑落。
Her fingers fumbled with the hem of her sweater.
她的手指紧张地摆弄着毛衣的边缘。
She drew in a shuddering breath, trying to steady herself.
她吸了一口颤抖的气，试图让自己镇定下来。
The microphone felt heavy and foreign in her clammy hands.
麦克风在她湿冷的手中显得沉重而陌生。
She cast a frantic glance towards the dark audience.
她慌乱地向黑暗的观众席瞥了一眼。
Her voice caught in her throat, coming out as a mere squeak.
她的声音卡在喉咙里，只发出一声微弱的吱吱声。
He was jumping up and down, giving her a thumbs-up.
他跳上跳下，对她竖起了大拇指。
She closed her eyes, shutting out the intimidating crowd.
她闭上眼睛，屏蔽了令人生畏的人群。
A wide, genuine smile finally broke across her face.
一个真诚的灿烂笑容终于在她脸上绽放。
心理描写
A wave of sheer panic washed over her, freezing her in place.
一阵彻底的恐慌席卷了她，让她僵在原地。
Her mind went completely blank, all lyrics vanishing into thin air.
她的脑子一片空白，所有歌词都消失得无影无踪。
The familiar dread of stage fright coiled tightly in her stomach.
那熟悉的怯场恐惧在她胃里紧紧缠绕。
A chorus of negative 'what-ifs' echoed in her head.
消极的“万一”想法在她脑中回荡。
She felt utterly alone under the spotlight's harsh glare.
在聚光灯刺眼的照射下，她感到无比孤独。
For a fleeting moment, she regretted ever agreeing to this.
在短暂的一瞬间，她后悔答应了这件事。
Seeing her friend's face, a glimmer of hope pierced through her fear.
看到朋友的脸，一丝希望的光芒刺穿了她的恐惧。
The old passion for music began to stir deep within her soul.
对音乐古老的热情开始在她灵魂深处涌动。
The crippling self-doubt slowly gave way to fragile confidence.
令人崩溃的自我怀疑慢慢让位于脆弱的信心。
She was flooded with an overwhelming sense of triumph and relief.
她心中涌起一股巨大的胜利感和解脱感。
环境描写
The stage lights were blinding, creating a wall of white around her.
舞台灯光令人目眩，在她周围形成了一堵白色的墙。
A hushed silence fell over the auditorium, heavy with expectation.
礼堂里一片寂静，充满了沉重的期待。
The sea of faces in the audience blurred into an anonymous mass.
观众席上的张张面孔模糊成匿名的一团。
The weight of countless eyes upon her felt almost physical.
无数双眼睛注视着她的重量，几乎让她有生理上的感觉。
The familiar wool of her grandfather's sweater was a small comfort against her
skin.
祖父织的毛衣那熟悉的羊毛质感，贴着她的皮肤带来一丝小小的安慰。
A single spotlight beam pinned her to the center of the vast stage.
一束聚光灯将她定格在广阔舞台的中央。
The expectant murmur of the crowd faded into a distant buzz.
人群期待的窃窃私语渐渐变成遥远的嗡嗡声。
The air backstage was thick with tension and the scent of nervous sweat.
后台的空气充满了紧张和汗水的味道。
The first note she sang cleanly cut through the tense silence.
她清晰唱出的第一个音符划破了紧张的寂静。
Thunderous applause erupted from the audience, washing over her like a warm
wave.
雷鸣般的掌声从观众席中爆发出来，像温暖的波浪一样冲刷着她。
常见单词高级替换与场景总结
常见词
高级替换词 (近义词)
适用场景
Nervous
Apprehensive (忧虑的), Trepidatious (惶恐
的), Jittery (紧张不安的), Daunted (气馁的)
描述上台前、面对
挑战时的复杂紧张
情绪
Happy
Elated (兴高采烈的), Overjoyed (欣喜若狂
描述成功克服困难
常见词
高级替换词 (近义词)
适用场景
的), Ecstatic (狂喜的), Jubilant (欢呼的)
后极度的喜悦和兴
奋
Look
Gaze (凝视), Peer (仔细看), Scan (扫描), Glan
ce (瞥见)
精细刻画人物视线
的方向和意图
Say
Urge (敦促), Exclaim (呼喊), Whisper (低语),
Mutter (咕哝)
根据对话的情绪和
音量选择更精准的
动词
Very
Exceedingly (非常), Utterly (完全地), Thoroug
hly (彻底地), Remarkably (显著地)
加强形容词或副词
的程度，避免very
的滥用
语料总结： 读后续写中，情感描写是核心。积累不同层次、不同强度的情感词
汇（如从nervous 到panic-stricken），并搭配具体的身体反应（动作）和环境烘
托，能使故事更真实动人。动词的选择要具体化，替代宽泛的say 和look。
常见搭配与词法解析
Eyes light up: (眼睛亮起来) 固定搭配，形象地表示“突然变得兴奋或喜悦”。
解析: Light up 是动词短语，此处用作不及物动词。
Bursting with ideas: (充满了想法) 固定搭配。Burst with 表示“充满（某种感情
或特质）并几乎要溢出来”，非常生动。
解析: Bursting 是现在分词作形容词使用，描述一种持续的状态。
Filled with a feeling: (充满了一种感觉) 常见搭配。Be filled with 比 have 更能体
现情感充斥身心的状态。
Stomach with butterflies: (胃里有蝴蝶) 英语习语，表示“因紧张而引起的恶
心、颤抖的感觉”，即“忐忑不安”。
解析: 这是一个名词短语，with 表示“带有…特征”。
Roaring success: (巨大的成功) 固定搭配。Roaring 原意是“咆哮的”，这里用
作强化语，比喻成功声势浩大。
解析: Roaring 是动名词作形容词，修饰名词 success。
Tongue-tied: (舌头打结) 形容词复合词，字面意思是“舌头被绑住了”，指
“（因紧张、害羞而）说不出话的”。
解析: 名词+动词过去分词构成的复合形容词，非常地道。
可积累语料与生词短语
Marvellous (adj.) /ˈmɑːvələs/
词意: 不可思议的；极好的
近义词: wonderful, fantastic, extraordinary, tremendous
反义词: terrible, awful, ordinary
例句:
She had the most marvellous feeling when she sang.
It was a marvellous performance that moved everyone.
Rehearsal (n.) /rɪˈhɜːrsl/
词意: 排练，彩排
近义词: practice, run-through, drill
反义词: performance, show (实际演出)
例句:
They held a final rehearsal the day before the concert.
The rehearsal process helped her memorize all the lines.
Roaring (adj.) /ˈrɔːrɪŋ/
词意: 咆哮的；喧闹的；巨大的（成功）
近义词: booming, thunderous, resounding, huge (success)
反义词: modest, slight, quiet (success)
例句:
The show was a roaring success.
The roaring fire kept them warm in the winter.
Tongue-tied (adj.) /ˈtʌŋ taɪd/
词意: （因紧张、尴尬而）说不出话的，张口结舌的
近义词: speechless, inarticulate, lost for words
反义词: articulate, eloquent, fluent
例句:
She became tongue-tied whenever she had to speak in public.
The surprising question left him completely tongue-tied.
Faint (v.) /feɪnt/
词意: 昏厥，晕倒
近义词: pass out, collapse, black out
反义词: come to, revive, regain consciousness
例句:
She nearly fainted from the shock and fear on stage.
The heat in the room was so intense that he felt like he might faint.
八、Possible Versions(4)
Version 1
Paragraph 1
I was wheeled into the operating room the next day. The bright lights hanging
overhead made my eyes ache, and the cold instruments on the tray looked sharper
than I imagined(环境描写). My heart pounded violently, as if trying to escape from my
chest(夸张描写). I clenched my fists, recalling
the coach’s repeated invitations
to join
the swimming team(现在分词短语做伴随动作). Back then, I had refused out of shyness, but now
I wished I had been braver, because real strength was not just physical but mental.
The doctor bent down and told me calmly that everything would be fine. His
reassuring tone soothed me a little, though fear still lingered in my mind(无灵主语句). As
the anesthetic took effect, I realized how fragile life could be, and my last conscious
thought was a promise to myself: if I was given a second chance, I would live
differently(预示变化).
Paragraph 2
When I finally returned home, I made a decision to change. The operation had
left me weak but also awakened a new courage inside me. I no longer wanted to
hide in my comfort zone or turn down opportunities. Remembering
the
coach’s patient encouragement(现在分词短语做伴随动作), I decided to step into the pool once
my body recovered. The first splash of water against my face filled me with both
nervousness and excitement, but unlike before, I chose to embrace the challenge.
Gradually, I discovered a sense of belonging and joy that I had never experienced.
Looking
back
(现在分词短语做伴随动作), I realized that the illness, though painful, had gifted
me a precious lesson: true strength lies not in pretending to be unbreakable, but
in daring to grow when life pushes you out of your safe corner.
高级语法点：
虚拟语气：if I was given a second chance, I would live differently
非限制性定语从句：The operation, though painful, had gifted me a
precious lesson.
强调句：It was not physical strength but mental courage that I lacked.
地道搭配：
cling to one’s comfort zone → stay safe without risk
be filled with nervousness and excitement → mixed feelings
gift sb. a lesson → teach a lesson indirectly
动作描写词汇：
my heart pounded violently (心跳剧烈)
clenched my fists (握紧拳头)
the first splash of water against my face (溅起的水花)
情绪描写词汇：
fear lingered in my mind → fear remained
a new courage awakened inside me → inner transformation
积累语料替换：
brave → courageous / bold / fearless
fragile → vulnerable / delicate
embrace the challenge → rise to the challenge / confront difficulties
例句积累：
She clenched her fists, trying to hide her trembling.
Fear lingered in his eyes, though he smiled bravely.
True courage lies in admitting weakness.
The unexpected illness gifted him wisdom he never asked for.
Version 2
Paragraph 1
I was wheeled into the operating room the next day. The air smelled strongly of
disinfectant, and the beeping machines made me shiver(环境描写). Lying
on the hard
bed(现在分词短语做伴随动作), I suddenly felt smaller than ever, my earlier confidence
vanishing like smoke.(独立主格，衔接原文) The nurse adjusted my blanket and whispered a
few comforting words(环境描写), which reminded me of my mother’s worried face
outside. Tears welled up in my eyes, yet I forced myself to take a deep breath.
“You are strong,” I murmured inwardly, “but strength also means endurance.” As
the mask was placed gently over my mouth, darkness slowly swallowed my fear(无灵主
语句). For the first time, I understood that even the strongest person needs help, and it
is courage, not pride, that carries you through hardship(强调句).
Paragraph 2
When I finally returned home, I made a decision to change. I realized that
hiding behind excuses had kept me from exploring my true potential. I promised
myself to listen more to others and seize chances that once terrified me. So, when
the coach again asked me to join the swimming team, I nodded with determination.
The first few trainings were tough, and I was breathless and sore, but each stroke
reminded me of the hospital bed where I had once felt powerless. Now, every lap
was proof that I was reclaiming strength in a healthier, braver way(同位从). The illness
no longer seemed a curse but a blessing in disguise, pushing
me toward growth
and self-discovery(现在分词短语做伴宿动作).
高级语法点：
强调结构：It is courage, not pride, that carries you through hardship.
倒装句：Only then did I realize how fragile I was.
非谓语：Lying on the hard bed, I suddenly felt smaller than ever.
地道搭配：
vanish like smoke → disappear completely
seize chances that once terrified me → grasp opportunities bravely
a blessing in disguise → hidden benefit
动作描写词汇：
beeping machines made me shiver
tears welled up in my eyes
every lap was proof
情绪描写词汇：
confidence vanishing
darkness swallowed my fear
reclaiming strength
积累语料替换：
hardship → adversity / difficulty / trial
terrified → horrified / frightened / scared stiff
determination → resolution / firmness / willpower
例句积累：
His hope vanished like smoke in the air.
Tears welled up as she waved goodbye.
The illness turned out to be a blessing in disguise.
Only then did he realize the importance of true friends.
Version 3
Paragraph 1
I was wheeled into the operating room the next day. The cold silence of the
room contrasted sharply with the storm inside my chest(环境心理描写). I tried to put on
a brave face, but my trembling hands betrayed me(无灵主语句). The doctor’s calm voice
instructed me to stay still, which reminded me of my coach’s firm yet kind
invitation for the swimming lessons. A wave of regret hit me—I should have
accepted his invitation earlier(虚拟语气), for I was learning now that escaping challenges
didn’t make me stronger. As the anesthesia spread through my veins, I whispered
a silent promise: if I survived this, I would stop running from life and start
embracing it.
Paragraph 2
When I finally returned home, I made a decision to change. The weakness after
surgery was frustrating, yet it reminded me that strength needed rebuilding. I began
with small steps—walking slowly, eating healthier, and saying “yes” to things(动名词
短语并列刻画变化) I once rejected. Soon after, I found myself back at the pool, waiting for
the coach to train me. This time, instead of hesitation, I felt determination burning
in my chest. Each dive symbolized a step away from fear and a step toward growth.
Looking
at the ripples spreading across the water
(现在分词短语做伴随动作), I smiled with
relief, knowing(现在分词短语做伴随动作) that illness had forced me to face what I had long
ignored—the courage to live fully.
地道搭配：
put on a brave face → try to look strong
burning determination → strong will
a step toward growth → move toward maturity
动作描写词汇：
trembling hands betrayed me
each dive symbolized
ripples spreading across the water
情绪描写词汇：
a wave of regret hit me
hesitation vs. determination
smiled with relief
积累语料替换：
regret → remorse / guilt / repentance
frustrating → discouraging / upsetting / irritating
embrace → accept / adopt / welcome
例句积累：
She put on a brave face, though her heart ached.
A wave of regret swept over him after the harsh words.
His determination burned brighter than ever.
Illness forced her to embrace life’s fragility.
官方One possible Version
I was wheeled into the operating room the next day. My mom was standing
outside. I wanted to cry. The doctor noticed that and asked me to take a deep breath.
Gradually I fell asleep. When I woke up after the operation, I felt very weak and my
mother was sitting beside my bed. When she saw me moving, she asked me if I was
still up for those burgers and fries. I said I didn't want to have them any longer.
Two days later, the pain disappeared, but a new realization dawned on life is
unpredictable, and no amount of avoidance can shield me from unexpected
challenges.
When I finally returned home, I made a decision to change. I started joining
small study groups in school, where I met new friends with different backgrounds. I
also went to the coach and asked him if he could get me on the swimming team and
help me learn. He agreed. With his assistance and my own hard training, I
participated in some big competitions. Whenever new friends asked me what led me
to swim professionally, I often replied. “ Appendicitis." It took an illness for me to
learn the true nature of life and how to never waste time and talents. And that
experience also taught me life's most valuable lessons come from the most
unexpected places.
