旅游见闻类故事
写作导图
一、观察顺序法
通过时间/空间顺序组织描写，增强画面逻辑性
1. The sun slowly peeked over the mountain ridge, painting the valley with golden strokes.
（太阳缓缓从山脊探出，用金色笔触为山谷上色）
解析：使用"peeked over"拟人动词，通过时间顺序展现日出过程
2. We followed the winding path upwards, passing wildflowers at ankle level, then chest-high shrubs,
until finally reaching ancient pines towering above.
（我们沿蜿蜒小径上行，先见脚踝高的野花，再经齐胸灌木，最终抵达高耸的古松）
解析：空间顺序"ankle-chest-towering"形成垂直视觉层次
3. Morning fog lingered in the hollows, but by midday, every dewdrop on spiderwebs sparkled under
direct sunlight.
（晨雾萦绕山谷，正午时分蛛网露珠在直射阳光下闪烁）
解析：时间词"morning-midday"构成自然过渡
4. From the cable car window, the cityscape shrank to miniature: matchbox cars crawled on ribbon roads,
skyscrapers stood like colored pencils in a cup.
（缆车窗外，城市缩成微景：火柴盒汽车在缎带路上爬行，摩天楼如彩铅插笔筒）解析：空间视角由近及远，比喻生动
二、感官描写法
调动五感让场景立体可感
1. The sea breeze carried saltiness that clung to our lips, while seagulls' cries mingled with waves'
rhythmic applause.
（海风裹挟咸味粘住双唇，海鸥啼叫与浪涛节拍相和）
解析：味觉"盐味"+听觉"叫声/掌声"营造海滨氛围
2. Crunching through autumn leaves, we caught whiffs of woodsmoke from distant cottages, their
chimneys sketching thin lines against lavender sky.
（踩着沙沙秋叶前行，远处木屋炊烟飘来柴火香，烟囱在淡紫天空勾画细线）
解析：听觉"crunching"+嗅觉"woodsmoke"激活多重感官
3. My fingers traced the temple's weathered stones, their cool roughness whispering stories of eight
centuries.
（手指抚过寺庙风化石材，凉意粗糙感低语八百年沧桑）
解析：触觉描写赋予历史厚重感
4. The night market assaulted our senses: sizzling satay smoke stung eyes, chili aroma tickled nostrils,
vendors' chants competed with pop music blaring from shops.
（夜市冲击感官：沙爹油烟刺痛眼睛，辣椒香挠痒鼻腔，摊贩叫卖与店铺流行乐争鸣）
解析：视觉/嗅觉/听觉交织呈现市井活力
三、情感融入法
通过环境描写反映人物心境
1. Each step on the cobblestone alley echoed my hesitation, shadows lengthening like doubts as sunset
bled across medieval walls.
（卵石巷脚步声回应犹豫，夕阳染红古墙时阴影如疑虑蔓延）
解析：环境描写"阴影/夕阳"映射心理活动2. Laughter bubbled from the plaza fountain, its merry splash a stark contrast to the heavy suitcase
dragging at my arm.
（广场喷泉迸发欢快水声，与我臂上沉重行李箱形成鲜明对比）
解析：用欢快环境反衬疲惫心境
3. The abandoned lighthouse stood sentinel on the cliff, its cracked lens staring vacantly seaward,
mirroring my sense of directionless.
（废弃灯塔如哨兵矗立悬崖，裂痕镜头茫然望海，映照我的迷失）
解析：拟物手法实现情景交融
4. Cherry petals snowed around us, their fleeting beauty tightening my throat - tomorrow we would part
at this very station.
（樱瓣如雪飘落，转瞬即逝的美景扼住咽喉——明日我们将在同个车站分别）
解析：自然现象触发情感共鸣
四、语言提升技巧
运用修辞增强文字表现力
1. Twilight draped the savanna in indigo velvet, acacia trees silhouetted like nature's calligraphy.
（暮色为草原披上靛蓝天鹅绒，金合欢树影宛如自然书法）
解析：比喻"velvet/calligraphy"提升画面美感
2. The glacier groaned and cracked, ancient ice cubes clinking in nature's cocktail shaker.
（冰川呻吟开裂，古老冰块在自然调酒器中叮当作响）
解析：拟声词+新奇比喻创造听觉意象
3. Dawn tiptoed across rice terraces, gilding each watery step with liquid gold.
（黎明蹑足走过梯田，为每层水阶镀上流动金箔）
解析：拟人+"liquid gold"创新表达
4. Our campfire danced with orange tongues, swallowing twilight stars whole while birthing
constellations in rising sparks.（篝火舞动橘色火舌，吞噬暮星却在飞溅火星中孕育新星座）
解析：矛盾修辞法制造诗意张力
背精彩句子，让表达出彩
1．After hours of hiking, we finally reached the summit of the mountain and were rewarded with a
breathtaking view.
经过几个小时的徒步旅行，我们终于到达了山顶，并欣赏到了壮丽的景色。
2．My brother and I harvested a meaningful exploration and it was really a brand new weekend.
我和哥哥收获了一次有意义的探索，这真是一个全新的周末。
3．Our being lost added a special taste to my adventurous vacation which I would remember all my
life.
我们的迷路给我的冒险假期增添了一份特别的滋味，我将终生难忘。
4．Very tired as they were, they had to strengthen up to spend a night there.
虽然他们很累，但他们不得不鼓起勇气在那里过夜。
5．The first thing he did was to shelter from the freezing wind and snow.
他做的第一件事就是躲避寒风和雪。
6．She tried to make her way quietly through the underbrush, but she was nearly scared to death
when she saw a large snake coil up before her.她试图悄悄地穿过灌木丛，但当她看到一条大蛇盘绕在她
面前时，她几乎吓死了。
7．The only thing we could do was just sitting in the cold air and wondering how to get out of the
forest.
我们唯一能做的就是坐在寒冷的空气中，想着如何走出森林。
8．Whether it's a weekend getaway or a month-long adventure, there's nothing like the excitement of
planning a trip.
无论是周末度假还是为期一个月的冒险，没有什么比计划旅行更令人兴奋的了。
9．Despite feeling weak, Nicholas was generally in a good condition, and he was really happy as he was
carried back to the ski resort to reunite with his family.
尽管感觉很虚弱，但尼古拉斯总的来说状态很好，当他被抬回滑雪场与家人团聚时，他真的很开
心。
10.Finally, we went out of the forest that trapped us．What an unforgettable experience! It turns out
that there's always a way out of any difficult situation as long as we stay calm.
最后，我们走出了困住我们的森林。 多么难忘的经历啊！ 事实证明，只要我们保持冷静，就总
有办法摆脱困境。
11.Traveling to new destinations is an adventure that always fills me with excitement.前往新的目的地
是一次冒险，总是让我兴奋不已。12.Whether it's hiking through the mountains or surfing on the beach, every adventure brings its
own unique challenges and rewards.
无论是在山上徒步旅行还是在海滩上冲浪，每一次冒险都会带来自己独特的挑战和回报。
13.Near the top, thick snow blanketed the path．Excitedly, the kids raced across the hard surface.
在山顶附近，厚厚的积雪覆盖了这条小路。孩子们兴奋地在坚硬的表面上奔跑。
14.When the sun disappeared behind heavy gray clouds, they suddenly felt lost, cold and hungry.当太
阳消失在厚重的灰色云层后面时，他们突然感到迷茫、寒冷和饥饿。
15.Exhausted and bloodied，he emerged from the forest and bumped into a family of hikers，who
called 911.他筋疲力尽，浑身是血，从森林里出来，撞见一群徒步旅行者，他们拨打了911。
高考真题演练
2017年11月浙江卷（和妈妈去旅行）
A vacation with my mother
I had an interesting childhood: It was filled with surprises and amusements, all because of my mother —
loving, sweet, yet absent-minded and forgetful. One strange family trip we took when I was eleven tells a lot about
her.
My two sets of grandparents lived in Colorado and North Dakota, and my parents decided to spend a few
weeks driving to those states and seeing all the sights along the way. As the first day of our trip approached, David,
my eight-year-old brother, and I unwillingly said good-bye to all of our friends. Who knew if we’d ever see them
again? Finally, the moment of our departure arrived, and we loaded suitcases, books, games, camping equipment,
and a tent into the car and bravely drove off. We bravely drove off again two hours later after we’d returned home
to get the purse and traveler’s checks Mom had forgotten.
David and I were always a little nervous when using gas station bathrooms if Mom was driving
while Dad slept: “You stand outside the door and play lookout (放哨) while I go, and I’ll stand outside the door and
play lookout while you go.” I had terrible pictures in my mind: “Honey, where are the kids?” “What?! Oh, Gosh…
I thought they were being awfully quiet.” We were never actually left behind in a strange city, but we weren’t about
to take any chances.
On the fourth or fifth night, we had trouble finding a hotel with a vacancy. After driving in vain for some
time, Mom suddenly got a great idea: Why didn’t we find a house with a likely-looking backyard and ask if wecould set up tent there? David and I became nervous. To our great relief, Dad turned down the idea. Mom never
could understand our objections. If a strange family showed up on her front doorstep, Mom would have been
delighted. She thinks everyone in the world is as nice as she is. We finally found a vacancy in the next town.
注意：
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph 1: The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brought with us.
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模拟演练
1．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Kathy’s family vacation to the beach was usually the highlight of her summer. This year, however, her
parents announced a new rule: no phones for the entire week.
“But my friends will be expecting updates about the trip,” Kathy complained. Kathy’s mom gave her a
serious look. Unwillingly, Kathy handed her phone over and her mom locked it away.
The drive to the beach house took most of the day. As they turned off the highway onto countryback
roads, the clouds darkened. Rain started to pour. “Even more beautiful in the rain,” her mother said. “What do
you think, Kathy?” Kathy glared at her mom. “Beautiful,” she muttered.
That night after dinner, Kathy wandered into the kitchen, where her father was washing dishes. She gave
her father a loving look and said in her sweetest voice, “Couldn’t I have my phone back, just for one second?Just so I can tell everyone what an amazing time I’m having?”
“Can’t,” he said. “It’s not here. Remember?” Kathy was very annoyed. Having nothing better to do, she
examined the dusty bookcase in the living room. The books looked as dull as the weather. On the top shelf,
however, she spotted a puzzle. She took it, emptied the pieces on the table, and began to sort them.
After what seemed like a few minutes, she looked up. It was past ten o’clock. She had been working for
almost two hours! She yawned. The puzzle was less than half done, but she was exhausted. So, she went to
bed.
注意：
1． 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2． 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好。
Paragraph 1:
After a quick breakfast, Kathy headed to the beach.
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Appreciating the finished puzzle, she realized she hadn’t thought of her cellphone for hours.
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2．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Winter break was approaching, and all Scott wanted to do was go snowboarding. Unfortunately, Scott's
parents had different plans. They had booked a weeklong tropical cruise (热带船游). Scott hated warm
weather and asked if he could just stay at his best friend's house so he could snowboard every day at the local
mountain. His parents didn't want to hear anything of it. He kept debating them about the topic, but they
would not change their minds. Family time was important to them, and it was tradition that they spend winterbreak together.
The week of the cruise arrived, and Scott continued to mumble (咕哝) his complaints as he and his
family left their house to head south. Scott's dad told him that he would only make the vacation worse for
himself if he didn't change his attitude and open his mind to a new experience. Scott still couldn't stop thinking
about all of the snow he was leaving behind.
When they arrived at the port to board the ship, Scott had a hard time admitting that he was actually
impressed with the size of the ship. He had seen the brochures but seeing the ship in person was a whole
different animal. Then he remembered that the brochure said something about a surfing pool. Maybe surfing
would be somewhat like snowboarding. After all, it involved riding a board.
Scott climbed aboard the ship with his parents, and then they walked around to check everything out. He
couldn't believe how fancy the accommodations were. The dining room looked like a royal hall; the game
room had all of his favorite games; the ship's deck (甲板) had several different swimming pools for different
purposes. Then Scott saw the surfing pool. It was incredible. It wasn't a big pool, but it had big waves, and the
young man who was demonstrating how to ride the waves made it look like a ton of fun.
注意：
1． 续写词数应为150左右;
2． 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Scott asked his parents if he could try surfing.
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Gradually, Scott began to love the cruise.
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3．阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文。
It was August. We were on vacation, just my six-year-old son Kevin and I, for my husband was always
busy. Having driven from our home in the city to a remote and peaceful place, we wouldn’t see friends or
family—it would be a nice, safe, socially distanced week away. We had hiked about half mile to an attractive
spot called Diana’s Baths, which afforded visitors an expanse of transparent water. The water flows and thenfalls off a series of big flat stones, making itself a small waterfall, about 7 inches high.
Several couples and their kids in swimsuits were playing to their heart’s content in the water. We joined
them. I watched as some younger parents nervously drove their babies away from the stones edges. Fast-
moving water made standing there quite dangerous, for I saw a certain kid with curly hair missed a step and
almost fell down. The air was full of shouts and laughter. I felt so lucky that I didn’t always need to fix my
eyes on my son. Kevin could navigate his physical space with more confidence and care. But I was still
terrified when I saw Kevin jump between the slippery rocks.
But with the passing of time, I soon relaxed, and we were both having fun, my kid splashing and kicking
in the cool water, laughing heartily as I put my head under the cold running water.
Then seconds later, every fear I’d ever had rose to the surface. I lifted my head, turned and saw Kevin
sitting between two stones, with the rushing water flowing around him. I could see he was shaking sometimes
because of the water rapids. I yelled at him to get out. He yelled back something that I couldn’t hear.
注意:
1． 续写词数应为150左右;
2． 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Suddenly he disappeared in front of my eyes.
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When Kevin returned to normal. I learned the woman was a nurse.
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4．阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。
Adventures Through the Gorge
We put the raft in the calm,cold water.I looked down.The water was like a mirror.It was a foggy
morning,so I could barely make out what was down the river.When we took our places in the raft,I was in the
back with my dad right across from me.Our tour guide was telling us the basics of rafting,and it seemed she
was patronizing us!I was terrified.Since I was in the back,I was sure I would be the one to fall out.But I have
always been an optimist,so I thought it would turn out okay.
Then I looked up and saw a big,gray cloud.I looked down at the river,and it started to get louder and
closer to us;soon raindrops pelted us.Once we moved out of the rain,the clouds faded away,and the sun was
shining down on us for the rest of the day.As I looked around,I saw the monstrous,green trees standing over
me.It was beautiful.
As we moved farther down the river,I heard the water flowing gracefully.When we moved deeper into the
gorge,it got louder and louder.This was our first rapids.It seemed that we were approaching the rapids
slowly,but we were at the top of the rapids in the blink of an eye.It felt like time frozen.I was so excited and
nervous;I thought I was going to die.It was a bumpy ride down.Getting splashed with water,we raced up and
down the rocks.There was not a patch of dry skin on us by the time we hit the bottom.
After we got through the rapids,I was so excited!Going down made me feel I could do anything.Our tour
guide told us we were going to approach Category V rapids.It was more intense than the Category I rapids,and
I got a little more nervous.It took us a little while to get to the rapids because we had to go down a long
river.We were allowed to jump off the raft and swim down the river until we had to get back in.
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About three minutes later,the Category V was coming.
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After racing down all of the rapids,I was no longer scared.
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5．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
This past summer, I joined my sister's family for their annual Adirondack vacation in a rented cottage ona lake, the same place my family has stayed since I was a little kid. There are plenty of activities to keep
everyone busy: swimming, fishing and sand castle building on the beach.
By the third day, I had noticed that my ten-year-old niece, Jannie, had spent most of her time watching
cable TV and browsing through the gift shops in town. Not exactly the wilderness experience I remembered
from my youth. So, at dinner, I told Jannie we should hike to the top of the mountain across the lake the
following morning, which was called Rocky Point because the peak is bare and rock-covered.
"Well." replied Jannie, "Tomorrow there are some shows on the Disney Channel, so I'm going to be pretty
busy."
"When your mother and I used to come here when we were your age, we were too busy swimming and
hiking up mountains."
"Sounds more like punishment than a vacation." She shrugged her shoulders. "Besides, I don't think I can
walk that far."
When I said it only took a half-hour of steady walking to get to the top. She grumbled, "Fine, I'll go." I
knew she was agreeing just to shut me up, but I would take anything I could get.
The next morning was a perfect day for a hike, with sunshine and clear skies. I got up early and took
some sandwiches and water bottles, which I tucked into my backpack along with the bug spray and the
camera.
Jannie came shuffling downstairs, sighed dramatically, rolled her eyes and announced in a very
unenthusiastic, robot-like voice. "I'm ready to go hiking, Uncle David." Anyway, we climbed into my car and
drove to the trailhead about ten minutes away. As we stood at the edge of the parking lot and looked down the
shaded trail that led into the woods. "I am still not sure this is a good idea, but if you and Mom could do it, I
can too, I guess."
注意：
1．续写词数应为150左右；
2．请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
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For the moment she was determined to start our journey.
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A while later we did it to the top.
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