梦想类故事
写作导图
一、构建核心冲突
1. The torn ballet shoes in her hands trembled as she counted her last savings.
（她颤抖着数最后的积蓄，手中破旧的芭蕾舞鞋不住晃动。）
解析：通过torn shoes和last savings的细节对比，暗示经济困境与舞蹈梦想的冲突。
2. Coach's words echoed in his mind: 'Your height will limit your basketball career.'
（教练的话在他脑中回响：你的身高会限制篮球生涯。）
解析：用直接引语强化权威否定，建立人物与客观条件的冲突。
3. Every stroke on the canvas felt like betraying her father's wish for a doctor in the family.
（每次画笔触碰到画布，都像在背叛父亲要家里出医生的愿望。）
解析：用比喻手法将艺术追求与家庭期待具象化，增强情感张力。
4. The scholarship application form lay untouched beside her mother's medical bills.
（奖学金申请表原封不动地躺在母亲的医药单旁。）
解析：静物并置场景无声传达责任与梦想的艰难抉择。
二、塑造人物互动1. Grandpa's calloused hands gently straightened my lab coat. 'Your mom would be proud,' he whispered.
（爷爷粗糙的手轻轻抚平我的实验服。你妈妈会骄傲的，他低声说。）
解析：通过触觉细节与低声话语，展现隔代支持的力量。
2. You call this art? The gallery owner scoffed, kicking the clay sculpture. It's just dirt!
（这也算艺术？画廊主嗤笑着踢开泥塑，不过是烂泥！）
解析：动作动词scoffed/kicking配合尖刻语言，塑造反面角色激发斗志。
3. The librarian slid a worn copy of 'Jane Eyre' across the counter. 'Third shelf, right section needs
reorganizing.'
（图书管理员将破旧的《简爱》推过柜台。第三层右区需要整理。）
解析：用间接方式表现支持，暗示提供勤工俭学机会的善意。
4. My little sister glued sequins on my torn dance costume. 'Now it's a star dress!' she beamed.
（妹妹在破舞服上粘亮片。现在是星星裙啦！她笑容灿烂。）
解析：儿童的天真行为象征希望，建立情感支撑点。
三、设计转折事件
1. The audition notice fluttered into the trash bin... until the janitor's mop handle fished it out.
（试镜通知飘进垃圾桶...直到清洁工的拖把杆把它捞起。）
解析：意外拯救物品预示转机，平凡人物成为命运推手。
2. Rain blurred the mural I'd painted for days. But the colors bled into something more beautiful.
（雨水模糊了我画多日的壁画，但晕染的色彩创造出更美的图案。）
解析：自然力量促成艺术突破，阐释不完美即完美的哲理。
3. The rejected manuscript paper made perfect kindling... for the campfire where I met my future editor.
（被退稿的纸张成为完美引火物...在篝火旁我遇到了未来编辑。）
解析：物品功能转化推动情节转折，体现命运巧合中的必然。
4. My trembling hands opened the envelope: 'Regret to inform you...' But a sticky note fell out: 'Try ouryouth program!'
（颤抖的手拆开信封：很遗憾通知...但便签掉落：试试青年计划！）
解析：双重信息制造情绪起伏，在否定中埋藏希望。
四、升华故事主题
1. The stage lights blinded me, but in that whiteness I finally saw my path clear.
（舞台灯光刺目，但在那片纯白中我终于看清前路。）
解析：用感官体验隐喻顿悟，将物理光明转化为心灵启示。
2. My gold medal hangs next to dad's old work boots - two symbols of different dreams, equally
valuable.
（我的金牌与父亲的旧工靴并挂——不同梦想的象征，同等珍贵。）
解析：物品并置传达价值观转变，肯定多元成功定义。
3. The orphanage kids clapped off-beat to my piano piece. That was the most beautiful symphony I'd ever
heard.
（孤儿院孩子们不合拍地鼓掌，那是我听过最动听的交响乐。）
解析：反讽手法重新定义成功，强调梦想的精神价值。
4. I placed the first rose from my garden on Ms. Thompson's desk. Thirty years ago, she planted the seed
saying 'Be patient.'
（我将花园第一支玫瑰放在汤普森老师桌上。三十年前她播下种子说要耐心。）
解析：双关语贯通时空，揭示梦想培育的传承意义。
写作技巧总结：
1. 用5W要素检查表确保情节完整：
• Who（梦想主体）
• What（具体梦想）
• When（关键时间节点）
• Where（典型场景）
• Why（深层动机）2. 情绪曲线设计建议：
渴望（20%）→ 受阻（30%）→ 转折（25%）→ 奋斗（15%）→ 领悟（10%）
3. 推荐过渡句式：
• Little did I know...（用于铺垫转折）
• It wasn't until...that...（强调顿悟时刻）
• What seemed like...actually...（引导主题升华）
模拟演练
1．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Lungs nearly bursting, I struggled to lift my head out of the water. Inch by inch, my tired body reached for
the end of the pool.
Earlier that week, I had turned in my first job application at a local pool. Overqualified, I was hired on the
spot. However, the tasks were boring: helping confused visitors and measuring the height of children before
they went down the slide, those sorts of things. I was competent for more.
So a swim test was required, establishing the mere fact that I was not completely helpless in a pool.
Midway through, the manager administering the test remarked. “This looks really easy for you. Why aren’t you
applying to become a guard? ”
“The thought hadn’t crossed my mind.”
“Well, lifeguarding demands more responsibility, strength and respect. Thus the position pays $2 more per
hour. Your swimming skills are strong enough. All you need to do is complete a certification class. ”Inside I
was unsure of myself, but his words inspired me — You never know what you are competent to do until you
force yourself to do it. Soon I passed the swim test. All left was to practice and learn first aid, CPR (心肺复苏),
and procedures for different land and water-based emergencies.
Work started soon. Days, weeks, and months went by without incident; emergencies were rare. The skills
and training I had so carefully studied and attained seemed unnecessary.
Today appeared to be another uneventful (平静无事) day. However, shortly after the other guards signaled
to the children to exit the pool, I noticed one boy was still in the middle while the others had climbed up.
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“Something must have gone wrong with him,” I thought to myself.
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Having the boy on the floor, I put my ear to his mouth and my fingers at his neck.
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2.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词
数应为150左右。
I should have been born with my fingers permanently glued to a keyboard. Since I was five, I’ve known
that I want to be a professional writer: a journalist, a novelist, a modernday Shakespeare, maybe. In my
freshman year I tried to figure out what A Midsummer Night’s Dream and The Tragedy of Julius Caesar
were about. Macbeth was much easier to understand in my sophomore year (大二年级).
However, I’m practically addicted to books, whether I’m reading or writing them. I can’t go a single day
without writing something. I have made it a rule to pick up a pen and just let my thoughts out every day.
I can be inspired by anything: an expression, a song and a movie. Once I get inspired, it’s like the wheels
turning faster and faster as I think out one possible story after another.
My family is so widespread that whenever I meet with a cousin or an aunt I only vaguely (模糊地)
remember; I tell him or her I’m a writer because I know it will distinguish me from all the other kids in the
family and make me memorable. I told my relatives about the stories I used to write as a child, the projects I’m
working on now, and why I’m working so hard to make a breakthrough in the competitive world of publishing.
One aunt hugged me and told me, “Just don’t forget about the rest of us when you become the next J. K.
Rowling.”
Smiling, I replied, “Don’t worry, I won’t.” I am confident that I will become the next J. K. Rowling. I have
the ambition, the means, and the talent. My English and history teachers don’t praise my writing and tell me I
have an innate (与生俱来的) writing talent even though they know how passionate I am about writing, and howthat passion slips through my fingertips to the paper.
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I don’t really know why I love writing so much.
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Maybe I just want to leave my mark on the world since I can’t sing to create a great work of art.
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3．阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Getting to watch surgery should be exciting for any medical student. But in my case, while two doctors
were doing the operation, I was checking my phone every 20 seconds to see how much longer it would be until
I could leave. I didn’t belong there; I was only pretending to be there. The truth was that, halfway through
university, I knew I didn’t want to be a doctor. And I had to decide whether to keep lying to myself, or change
my major.
Before university, I had no idea what I wanted to do with my life. Pd always wanted to study English but
my parents didn’t approve, saying there was no money in it. So I figured I’d just pick a career that looked well-
paid, satisfying, and would make my parents proud. “Doctor” is the first choice, so I decided to study medicine.
I knew all the coursework wouldn’t be easy, but I didn’t expect to find it as hard as I did. I spent many late
nights and weekends studying, but still didn’t get good grades. I just couldn’t keep the material in mind. By
exam time, my grades were terrible and I felt like a fool. I thought maybe a medical internship (实习医生的工
作) would help raise my spirits. Absurdly, my internship was where I realized how little I wanted to be a doctor.Every day I’d just go into work and do exactly what I was told, go where I was told to go, and watch what
I was told to watch. And then I’d go home. It was fun whenever I got to play with expensive microscopes or
watch crazy surgery, but the rest of the time I struggled to get through the day. The other interns, however,
practically worked so hard. They were so driven. I thought, “Wow, these interns really want to be doctors. I
obviously don’t. “It was a sad realization that sadder, scarier question: If I didn’t want to be a doctor, what did I
want to do?
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It wasn’t an easy decision.
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Eventually, I changed my major to English writing and suddenly I found university enjoyable.
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4．阅读下面短文, 根据所给情节进行续写, 使之构成一个完整的故事。
Three months later was the Middle School Championship Baseball Game of the spring season! The
winners would all get trophies (奖杯), Jonas was determined to bring home a trophy to put on his shelf for he
had never won one before.
He insisted on practicing in the stadium with friends every day. Day in and day out, the gloves became
worn-out. Jonas thought, “I want a pair of new baseball gloves for better practice!“
Jonas passed by a store and saw a pair of delicate gloves, which cost thirty-five dollars. But when Jonas
asked for the new baseball gloves, his mother only sighed. “Your birthday isn’tuntil July, ” she said. “If you
want the gloves sooner than that, you will have to buy it yourself. If you want something, earn it by yourself. ”Jonas thought hard. He was too young to drive to work like Dad, and he couldn’t turn his bedroom into an
office to work at home like Mom. He went to his favorite thinking spot to look at the bird feeder in his back
yard.
As Jonas was thinking about getting a job, it began to snow. At first there were only a few flakes (雪花),
but soon the ground turned white.
“I know!” cried Jonas. “I’ll shovel (铲) the sidewalks on snow days. If I’m fast, I can do a lot of houses
and make a lot of money. ”
So Jonas put on his warmest sweater and fastened the button of his winter coat. He also added scarf,
gloves and a hat. Then he went into the garage to grab a shovel.
Jonas started next door. He rang the bell and asked Mr. Travers if he would like his sidewalks shoveled.
“Yes,” said Mr. Travers. “But you should wait until it stops snowing before you start or you will have to do it
twice.”
“I’ll be back!” said Jonas. He went around the block to see who would like their walks shoveled after the
storm. He had eight customers by the time he got back to his own house.
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When it stopped snowing, Jonas grabbed his shovel and got to work.
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Tired but happy, Jonas looked at the forty dollars earned from his work.
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5．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Having struggled with financial difficulties for six months and failing to find a way out, I had to close mytechnology writing business. Fortunately, I found a new job as a salesperson and soon got a client. At the time, I
wondered if it was too good to be true.
By the second month, something didn’t seem right, and I developed a bad feeling about the client and the
work. When the third month’s check didn’t arrive on time, I sent the client an e-mail to find out what was going
on. But there was no reply. Then I sent another e-mail, and another. The check never arrived, and I never heard
from the client again. With no hope in sight, I hit rock bottom. Panic replaced cautious optimism along with my
last self-confidence.
I hid myself from friends and locked myself in my room. One night, the phone rang. The call was from
Eric, a friend of mine from high school. When he was in high school, he told me many times about his parents’
divorce and his loss of confidence in the college entrance examination. During the difficult time, I gave him
much comfort and encouragement. Later, he went to college and was always grateful for what I had done.
After the greetings, I told my problems and challenges, hoping my friend would say something
comforting. What I didn’t expect was a string of sharp words. “What is wrong with you? You can do anything
you want to do,” he said. “You are a writer, so start writing. Write for magazine.” “Write for magazine? Are you
out of your mind? I don’t know the first thing about writing for magazine, let alone write things that anyone
would want to read. And I have to know where I can send an application form-to what magazine and to what
editor,” I shouted at him.
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Surprisingly, I felt a little better after the shouting.
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On finishing the application form I sent it to the editor.
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6．阅读下面材，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一个完整的故事，续写短文的
词数为 150 左右。
Amy is good at making pies, which got her hired at the Good Times restaurant months ago. And she was
often regarded as the best worker there. Recently, she became the supervisor at the restaurant. She was kind and
friendly to all the other workers and the customers.
One morning, Amy was taking orders when she overheard a conversation. “What you did there was great,
Mason! It was hard to carry the old lady safely out of the fire. For a moment, I thought you were gone, my
friend,” one man said. To this, the other man replied, “Yeah, it was difficult, but that’s our job. And you were
the hero today, Gordon. You carried that girl on your shoulder and her dog in your hand. It’s going to be on the
front page tomorrow, I’m telling you.”
From their clothing and conversation, Amy knew they were firefighters. And she quickly realized that they
had been talking about the previous night’s fire at the old motel on the other end of the road. Then the man
named Gordon continued, “I don’t care about being in the papers. The little girl and her dog reminded me of my
own daughter. She’s constantly asking for a dog, too.” Amy was moved by the courage and sincerity of the two
men. She wanted to show her appreciation for their selfless service.
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“How about helping pay for their meal?” she wondered.
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Then she went to the cashier and secretly paid for their meal.
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In 1989，fresh out of high school, I had the difficult task of choosing a career path before college started
in three months. In those days in Pakistan, there were limited options: becoming a doctor or an engineer or
entering the financial world after getting a business degree. I wasn’t interested in engineering, so I was left
with medicine or business. I couldn’t decide.
My uncle, an influential person in the family,suggested that I do a placement (实习工作) to experience
it for a month in an international company followed by a month in a hospital. After that,I could make a
decision. It seemed like a brilliant idea.
I was accepted for a month’s placement at a foreign bank in Karachi. I understood a little about how the
world of finance functioned, made new friends, and generally enjoyed the mostly easygoing work surroundings.
The month passed rapidly, and soon I began working at a leading hospital in Karachi. The experience
couldn’t have been more different. The hospital had an intense environment. The days started early (at 7:00 am
compared to 9:00 am at the bank) and were filled with endless duties, and the night calls! This was crazy,
working all day, through the night,and again the next day.
I began thinking about my two experiences. The bank had offered a more relaxing atmosphere, better
working hours and less stress. The hospital was full of excitement and unpredictability, but the studying and
training was difficult.It seemed that the business option was going to win.
Near the end of my month at the hospital, I was driving home after an especially busy night call.In front of
me was a public bus, with college students sitting on the top. As the driver weaved through (traffic, I could see
the boys shaking from side to side.
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2． 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3． 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4． 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
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Suddenly, a boy fell off the back of the bus.
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The next day, when I went to hospital to see the boy, all his family members got up, with grateful smiles on
their faces.
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8．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成-篇完整的短文。
It was spring, and Steve wanted to get a new set (套装) of football, sports shoes, and a really cool
backpack. There was only one problem. That great set was too expensive. Steve only saved $10, and that was
not even close to what he would need to buy the set.“I could ask mom and dad to give my pocket money in
advance,” he thought to himself, “but that would be a big advance!”
That night, Steve told his parents the problem. “Have you ever thought about doing something for the
neighborhood to earn some extra money?” asked his dad. “No, it would take me too long to earn the money,”
answered Steve, “I need the new set for the school football match in two weeks.”
“Well, if you earn part of the money, I’ll advance you the rest. Is that OK?” suggested his dad. Steve
agreed with the offer, went back to his bedroom and thought about what he could do to earn some money.“Billy
from next door takes care of Mrs. Smith’s garden, Kelly walks Mr. Frank’s dog, and Tony washes Mr. Lipton’s
car. There is nothing that I can do to ear some money,” thought Steve.
The next day after school, Steve went past the store, Sports Time. He loved to lok in the window at all the
football equipment and other goods on the shelves. Steve went in and looked at the new football set he wanted.
“Hi, Steve,” said Mrs. Thomas,“what can I do for you today?”
“I want to see if there is a sale on that football set.”
“I am afraid not,” said Mrs. Thomas, “it is sill S60.”
“I only have $10 saved, and my dad said if I could do something for the neighborhood, he would advance
me the rest,” said Steve, and he told her about the school football match.
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Seeing that Steve was eager for the set, Mrs. Thomas came up with an idea.
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With her permission, Steve nushed to the new football set excitedly.
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9．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Appreciation of Hard Work
A young man applied for a managerial position in a big company. In the last interview, the director of the
company found that the young man was excellent all the way, from the secondary school until the postgraduate
research.
The director asked, “Did you obtain any scholarships in school?”
The youth answered, “None.”
The director asked, “Was it your father who paid for your school fees?”
The youth answered, “My father passed away when I was one year old. It was my mother who paid for my
school fees.”
The director asked, “Where did your mother work?”
The youth answered, “My mother worked as a clothes cleaner.”
The director asked the youth to show his hands. The youth showed his smooth hands.
The director asked, “Have you ever helped your mother wash the clothes before?”The youth answered, “Never, my mother always asked me to study and read more books. Besides, my
mother can wash clothes faster than me.”
The director said, “I have a request. When you go back today, clean your mother’s hands and then see me
tomorrow morning.”
When he went back, he happily asked his mother to let him clean her hands. His mother felt strange but
happy. The youth cleaned his mother’s hands slowly. His tears fell as he did that. It was the first time he noticed
that his mother’s hands were so wrinkled, and there were so many bruises in her hands. Some bruises were so
painful that his mother shivered when they were cleaned with water. After finishing the cleaning of his mother’s
hands, the youth quietly washed all the remaining clothes for his mother.
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The next morning, the young man went to the director’s office.
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The director asked, “Please tell me your feelings.”
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10.阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
It was my first job, working as a temporary sales girl during the Christmas rush at Richardson’s, the
finest jewelry store in our city.
The job was very important to me. Dad had passed away and Mother and I did not have enough to live on
in those hard Depression years. I worked in the diamond department. My duties were to arrange the goods,
keep them clean, and run errands (跑腿). It was interesting work that I enjoyed thoroughly.
As Christmas drew near, the days became more rushed, but also more exciting. One afternoon, Miss
Allan, the head of the department, asked me to get her the diamond ring from the end showcase. I hurried
back, with the ring in my hand when I noticed a man on the other side of the row of showcases. He was tall
and in his early thirties. But it was the expression on his face that stopped me. He looked bitter, angry and
confused. From his well-cut but worn-out suit, I could tell he was one of thousands trained for jobs they couldno longer find. He gazed at the beautiful stones with the despair of a man whose right to earn them had been
taken away. I had a sudden feeling of sympathy. But I had other things on my mind and soon forgot about him.
A few minutes later Miss Allan called for me again. This time for the clip (夹子) that went with the ring.
The clip was at the very front of the window. I got it. But just as I was backing out, my sleeve caught on the
corner of a tray (盘子) of diamonds. The tray started to fall, and six magnificent diamond rings rolled across
the floor.
Down on my knees, I collected five rings with the greatest speed and put them in the tray. But I couldn’t
find the sixth! I thought it must have slipped through the tiny opening between the showcase and the window.
I ran around the counter and looked down. It wasn’t there. Just then, out of the corner of my eyes I saw the
tall man moving quietly toward the door of the shop, a few yards away. At that moment I knew that he had
the ring. He had been standing at the only spot to which it could have rolled. I reached him just as he got to the
door.
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“Excuse me, please,” I said.
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“What do you want?” he repeated.
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