湖南省长沙市湖南师范大学附属中学2025 届高三下学期模拟试卷（二）英语
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Right after I had my first son, I found myself with a surplus of baby formula(奶
粉) I couldn't use due to his stomach issues. Not wanting it to go to waste, I turned to
a website for giving away items for free. Shortly afterward, a young woman from my
small town reached out, expressing her desperate need for the formula. She explained
that her husband had just passed away in an accident, leaving her in a difficult
situation. Feeling a tug at my heart, I immediately promised to save all the formula
for her.
However, three days passed, and I heard nothing. I tried to connect her but
failed. My husband suggested it might be a cruel joke or maybe some sort of sick
tricks. Unwilling to believe it, I decided to give it one last try.
This time I got through. In the telephone, I could hear the tiredness and strain in
her voice as she mentioned she’ d just managed to pay her phone bill and had to wait
until she could find a way to get closer to town. It was clear she was struggling.
Trying to keep my tone neutral, I offered to send the formula to her house. After an
awkward silence, she agreed and provided her address.
Once I hung up, I felt compelled to do more than just provide the formula. We
checked her address and discovered she lived in a desolate part of the town. Her
cottage was situated in the middle of the desert, far removed from any public
transportation. Realizing how tough her situation must be, I went through my
pantry(食品储藏室), fridge, and freezer, gathering anything we could spare. In total,
we filled three bags and a big laundry basket with food and essentials.
When we arrived at her home the next day, she welcomed us inside, her face
lacking in emotion. The sight that greeted me was heartbreaking: her living space was
almost empty,with only a single couch and a bare kitchen. Even when we unloaded
the items, she still seemed almost numb, as if life had drained all the color from her.
Without a word, she simply nodded, turned away, and mechanically began making a
bottle for her son, her movements slow and detached(抽离的).
注意：
1.续写词数应为150 左右；
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: On the way back home, I couldn't shake her from my mind.
Paragraph 2: Several weeks later, the woman came to me, visibly different.
湖南省长沙市湖南师范大学附属中学2025 届高三下学期模拟试卷（二）英语
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Right after I had my first son, I found myself with a surplus of baby
formula(交代主要人物的 背景信息) I couldn't use due to his stomach issues. Not wanting(现在分词的
否定形式，做原因状语)it to go to waste, I turned to a website for giving away items for free.
Shortly afterward, a young woman from my small town reached out, expressing(现在分
词做伴随动作) her desperate need for the formula. She explained that her husband had
just passed away in an accident, leaving
her in a difficult situation
(现在分词做结果状语).
Feeling
a tug at my heart
(现在分词做原因状语或伴随动作), I immediately promised to save all the
formula for her.
However, three days passed, and I heard nothing. I tried to connect her but
failed. My husband suggested it might be a cruel joke or maybe some sort of sick
tricks. Unwilling
to believe it
(现在分词短语做伴随动作), I decided to give it one last try.
This time I got through. In the telephone, I could hear the tiredness and
strain in her voice(语文中，这个是不是叫通感) as she
mentioned
she’ d just managed to pay
her phone bill and had to wait until she could find a way to get closer to town(刻画女
人的不容易). It was clear she was struggling. Trying to keep my tone neutral(现在分词做伴随动作，
显示女人的善良), I offered to send the formula to her house. After an awkward silence,
she agreed and provided her address.
Once I hung up, I felt compelled to do more than just provide the formula.
We checked her address and discovered she lived in a desolate part of the town.
Her cottage was situated in the middle of the desert, far removed(过去分词做后置定语) from
any public transportation.
Realizing
(现在分词做伴随动作) how tough her situation must be,
I went through my pantry, fridge, and freezer(名词并列), gathering
anything
(现在分词做
伴随动作) we could spare. In total, we filled three bags and a big laundry basket
with food and essentials.
When we arrived at her home the next day, she welcomed us inside, her face
lacking in emotion(独立主格刻画人物情绪). The sight that greeted me was heartbreaking:
her living space was almost empty, with only a single couch and a bare kitchen.
Even when we
unloaded the items
, she still seemed almost numb, as if life had
drained all the color from her(比喻句). Without a word, she simply nodded, turned
away, and mechanically began making a bottle for her son(动作串描写), her
movements slow and
detached
(独立主格交代人物的神态).
注意：1.续写词数应为150 左右；
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: On the way back home, I couldn't shake her from my mind.
Paragraph 2: Several weeks later, the woman came to me, visibly different.
一、读后续写任务整体分析
分析要素
内容
续写类型分类
救人助人类 情感类+现实生活类+正能量感人故事。涉及陌
生人之间的善意、共情与希望的传递。
构思思路
续写应围绕“我”无法忘记这位母亲（情感牵挂），进而采
取行动或情绪思考（第一段）以及若干周后母亲状态发生变
化（第二段）来展开，形成“行动-回应”的情节闭环。
布局策略
第一段为“内心起伏+可能的行为延伸”；第二段为“人物
转变+关系升华”。情节节奏由沉静走向温暖，呼应“爱与
希望”主题。
框架提炼
第一段：情感反思/决定再次帮助或继续关心 → 表达内
疚/责任/唤起共情；第二段：人物转变 → 表达感激 → 表
现新希望与情感连接
实施要点
情感递进自然（不能突兀）
行为逻辑合理（符合现实）
对话描写要简洁有效（体现人物情绪）
语言突出高中语法加分点
承接原文的要点
延续“她神情麻木、生活困顿”的状态设定
保持“我”善良、共情的性格特点
不添加新角色；仅限“我”、“丈夫”、“女子及其孩子”
情节发展需合理过渡，不能突兀“皆大欢喜”
巧妙设计建议
可通过“我”自责、做出小小后续帮助（如再次探访、寄信
或留言）形成情感递进
第二段刻画女子状态变化（如眼神有光、笑容浮现），与
“生活被点亮”形成照应
结尾可通过孩子笑声、一次拥抱、一句话完成情感升华
二、Story Mountain（故事山）结构分析
故事山要素
内容
开端
我发帖捐奶粉，女子因丈夫去世陷入困境联系我
上升
她失联 → 我尝试再次联系，感受到她困顿现状
高潮
我决定不仅送奶粉，还额外捐赠食物与生活用品
下降
到她家中，她状态麻木、生活凋敝、无情绪反应
结尾（待续写）第一段：我仍牵挂她，反思与共情；第二段：她状态改善，显
现温情回应，故事闭环
三、续写衔接与分析表格（结合原文原句）
分析角度
内容
原文反应句
人物刻画
“我”富有同理心、善良坚
持；女子悲伤、麻木、孤立无
援
“Feeling a tug at my heart…”；“her
face lacking in emotion”；“her
movements slow and detached”
情感层次
先是同情 → 焦虑与坚持 →
震惊与心疼 → 无法释怀 →
希望与温情
“Trying to keep my tone
neutral…”；“I felt compelled to do
more…”
关键情节点
女子首次失联 → “我”决定
再尝试 → 去她家看到真实状
况
“Unwilling to believe it…”；“we
discovered she lived…”
语言特色
第三人称叙述 + 心理描写 +
细节动作描写 + 情绪渲染
“mechanically began making a
bottle…”；“her face lacking in
emotion”
关键词分析
surplus, desperate, desolate,
detached, numb, strained,
awkward silence
强化“困境+距离+情绪封闭”的情
感基调
心理描写
我心生同情→反复尝试→共情
加剧→无法释怀
“I couldn’t shake her from my
mind”（段首提示）
动作描写
她做奶→我们送物资→她无言
接受→我内心挣扎
“mechanically began making a
bottle…”
环境描写
她家位于沙漠地区，生活空无
一物，展现孤立无援
“Her cottage was situated in the
middle of the desert”；“her living
space was almost empty”
隐含主题
在冷漠世界中施以温情与希
望；小善举能带来改变
故事主线整体围绕“陌生人的善意
与温暖”展开
情感转折
从冷漠麻木→若干周后“状态
改变”显现希望
段首句“visibly different”暗示明显
转变
空间转换
从“家→她家→返回” → 第
二段可设定在“我家”或公共
场所
“On the way back home”；“came to
me”
时间过渡
原文为“the next day”，续写需
根据段首句“Several weeks
later”承接
明确说明“数周时间变化”，推动
人物转变的合理性
3. 动作、心理、环境描写
动作描写
英文例句
中文翻译
She clutched the baby bottle tightly, as if it
were her last hope.
她紧紧抓着奶瓶，仿佛那是她最后
的希望。
英文例句
中文翻译
I knocked gently on the fragile door, unsure if
it would even hold.
我轻轻敲了敲那扇破旧的门，不确
定它是否还能支撑得住。
She dragged her feet to the kitchen, every step
filled with weariness.
她拖着沉重的步伐走向厨房，每一
步都充满了疲惫。
He reached out to hand her the basket, his eyes
scanning the empty room.
他递过篮子，眼睛扫视着空荡荡的
房间。
I watched as she mechanically twisted the lid of
the formula bottle.
我看着她机械地拧开奶粉瓶的瓶
盖。
She lowered her gaze, avoiding eye contact.
她低下了头，避免与人目光接触。
With trembling hands, she poured the warm
milk into the bottle.
她双手颤抖地将温热的牛奶倒入奶
瓶中。
She motioned us to sit, though no chairs were
in sight.
她示意我们坐下，尽管房间里连一
把椅子都没有。
He gently placed the bag near the empty
counter.
他轻轻把袋子放在空荡的操作台
上。
She opened the door slowly, her movements
hesitant and weak.
她缓缓打开门，动作迟疑而无力。
心理描写
英文例句
中文翻译
A wave of helplessness washed over me as I
saw the bare kitchen.
看到那间空荡的厨房，我感到一阵无
助袭来。
She looked lost in her own world, eyes
vacant and distant.
她仿佛沉浸在自己的世界里，眼神空
洞而遥远。
I felt a strong urge to do more, to offer more
than just food.
我感到一种强烈的冲动，不仅仅想提
供食物，还想做更多。
Her silence spoke volumes—it was the
silence of deep sorrow.
她的沉默意味深长，那是深深悲痛的
沉默。
My heart ached at the sight of her thin figure. 看到她瘦弱的身影，我的心都揪了起
来。
She seemed to exist in slow motion, as
though burdened by grief.
她的动作仿佛慢镜头播放，似乎被悲
伤压得喘不过气来。
I couldn't shake the feeling that life had been
unfair to her.
我挥之不去的一种感觉是，生活对她
太不公平了。
She appeared hollowed out, as if emotions
had long deserted her.
她像是被掏空了一般，仿佛早已失去
了所有情绪。
I sensed a quiet strength behind her
expressionless face.
我在她面无表情的脸后感受到一种隐
秘的坚强。
英文例句
中文翻译
Her eyes briefly met mine, revealing a flicker
of gratitude.
她的目光短暂地与我相遇，露出一丝
感激的光芒。
环境描写
英文例句
中文翻译
The cottage stood isolated in a stretch of desert,
surrounded by silence.
小屋孤零零地立在沙漠一角，四周
寂静无声。
A dusty wind swept across the barren yard,
carrying with it dry leaves.
带着枯叶的风扫过荒芜的院子。
The room was dim, lit only by a single flickering
bulb.
屋子里光线昏暗，只有一盏忽明忽
暗的灯泡。
The fridge hummed softly, the only sound in an
otherwise silent space.
冰箱轻轻地嗡嗡作响，是这寂静空
间里唯一的声音。
Cracks lined the walls like silent witnesses to
years of hardship.
墙上布满裂缝，像是艰辛岁月的无
声见证。
A thin curtain hung loosely, barely shielding the
sun’s harsh rays.
一块薄薄的窗帘松垂着，几乎遮不
住刺眼的阳光。
The kitchen counter was bare, save for an old
kettle and a bottle.
厨房操作台上空无一物，只有一只
旧水壶和奶瓶。
The floor creaked under our steps, a reminder of
the home’s age.
我们的脚步让地板吱嘎作响，提醒
着这是所老房子。
Outside, the landscape stretched endlessly, dry
and lifeless.
屋外景象一望无际，干枯而毫无生
机。
A faint smell of dust and loneliness lingered in
the air.
空气中弥漫着尘土与孤独的味道。
常见单词高级替换词
场景分类
常用词
高阶替换
含义
表达“帮
助”
help
assist / aid / support
协助；支持
表达“悲
伤”
sad
sorrowful / grief-stricken / despondent 悲痛的；沮丧的
表达“困
难”
hard /
difficult
challenging / demanding / harsh
艰难的
表达“好”
good
generous / considerate / compassionate 慷慨的；体贴的
表达“累”
tired
drained / exhausted / weary
筋疲力尽的
4. 固定搭配 + 生词短语词法解析
常见地道搭配
搭配
含义
示例句
a tug at my heart
触动我内心
Her story gave a real tug at my heart.
mechanical movements 机械般的动作She responded with mechanical movements.
pay the bill
付账单
She had just managed to pay her phone bill.
drained of emotion
情绪被抽干
Her face looked completely drained of
emotion.
filled with weariness
充满疲惫
Her body was filled with weariness.
生词短语解析
短语/单词词
性
词义
同义词
反义词
例句1
例句2
surplus
n. /
adj.
过剩；
多余
excess, extra
shortage,
lack
She had a
surplus of baby
formula.
The company
reported a budget
surplus.
desolate
adj.
荒凉
的；孤
独的
barren, bleak
lively,
vibrant
The cottage
stood in a
desolate area.
The room felt
cold and
desolate.
numb
adj.
麻木
的；失
去感觉
的
indifferent,
unfeeling
sensitive,
aware
Her hands were
numb with
cold.
She seemed
emotionally
numb.
pantry
n.
食品储
藏室
larder, store
room
—
I checked my
pantry for spare
food.
We stocked the
pantry with
supplies.
awkward
silence
短
语
尴尬的
沉默
uncomfortable
pause
—
There was an
awkward
silence on the
phone.
An awkward
silence fell over
the room.
5. Possible Versions(4)
Version 1
Paragraph 1: On the way back home, I couldn't shake her from my mind. Her
blank stare and trembling hands kept replaying in my head(无灵主语句，刻画心理吸纳接). I
realized she needed more than just diapers and formula—she needed comfort.
That night, I wrote her a letter, sharing(现在分词做伴随动作) how I once felt lost as a new
mother and how talking helped. I placed the note inside a bag of baby clothes,
along with
other
stuffs
. I didn’t expect a reply, but I hoped she’d feel seen. Days
passed, and though I tried to focus on my work, her fragile figure haunted my
thoughts.
Paragraph 2: Several weeks later, the woman came to me, visibly different.
Her eyes met mine(无灵主语句), softer(adj 做补语), no longer
filled
with fear
and
tiredness(过去分词做后置定语). Holding
my letter tightly
(现在分词做伴随动作), she whispered, “Your
words saved me.” She told me she'd started therapy and joined a single-mothers’
group. I was amazed by her strength. In that moment, I understood—sometimes, a
few sincere words can light up someone’s darkest night.
Version 2
Paragraph 1: On the way back home, I couldn't shake her from my mind. Her
silence
, her tired eyes
, and the way
(名词并列) she clutched her baby stirred
something in me(衔接心理描写). I couldn’t just walk away. The next morning, I returned—
not with supplies, but with a warm meal and an invitation
to a neighborhood
parenting group. She hesitated, but I saw the slightest nod(人物细节描写). We sat
together in silence. It wasn’t much, but it was a start. I visited twice more that
week, just listening, letting
her speak
(现在分词做伴随动作) when she was ready. Slowly, a
fragile connection grew.
Paragraph 2: Several weeks later, the woman came to me, visibly different.
She looked brighter, her shoulders less tense(独立主格刻画人物神态). “I went,” she said shyly,
referring
to the group
(现在分词做伴随动作). She shared how she felt encouraged and how,
for the first time, she didn’t feel invisible. As she spoke, I realized we had built
more than trust—we’d built a bridge from isolation to hope, one visit at a time(可
以理解为独立主格).
Version 3
Paragraph 1: On the way back home, I couldn't shake her from my mind. Her
room had been quiet, but I could still hear the silence—heavy, painful. She didn’t
say much, but her eyes spoke of exhaustion and fear(独立主格刻画人物). I couldn't ignore it.
That evening, I posted online asking
for help
(现在分词做伴随动作) and organized a
donation drive. Soon, neighbors offered
food, clothes, and even counseling
contacts(名词并列). I returned to her with these and told her she deserved more than
survival. She didn’t say a word but held the baby a little tighter. I took that as
hope.
Paragraph 2: Several weeks later, the woman came to me, visibly different. She
stood straighter, eyes clear(独立主格刻画人物神态), her baby
tucked safely in a carrier
(独立主格
刻孩子). “I signed up for a training course,” she said, “I want to work again.” I was
stunned. Gone was the woman lost in fear(完全倒装句). In her place stood someone(完全倒
装句) rising from pain(现在分词做伴随动作), building a future(现在分词做伴随动作). Her change
reminded me: when a hand reaches out, people find the strength to rise.
shake sb. from one's mind（挥之不去）
haunted by sth.（被……困扰）
whisper with emotion（低声说话，含情感色彩）
build a bridge from…to…（搭建从…到…的桥梁）
sign up for sth.（报名参加）
同义词替换 & 场景拓展
普通词
高级替换
场景联想
例句
tired
exhausted, drained
心理、生理双重
疲惫
She looked drained after days
without sleep.
help
support, aid,
assistance
心理援助、社区
援助
Community support made a huge
difference.
sad
devastated,
heartbroken
情感低谷、孤独
期
Her heartbroken face said it all.
change
transformation, shift 从沉默→自信
Her transformation was truly
inspiring.
lonely
isolated, abandoned 社会边缘人感受She felt abandoned until someone
spoke.
【官方参考范文】
On the way back home, I couldn't shake her from my mind. My heart ached
for the young woman(无灵主语句) and her son, their plight wandering in my thoughts(独
立主格). Determined
to offer more support
(adj 做主语补语), I set about researching local
resources and support networks that could assist her. I even reached out to a
nearby charity organization, accounting for her situation and pleading for their
help(现在分词做伴随动作). The response was overwhelming— clothes, toys, and even
monetary donations poured in(名词并列). Each contribution filled me with a sense of
gratitude and encouragement(无灵主语句), as if we were all part of a
larger,compassionate
tapestry
(虚拟语气). Faced
with the heartwarming contributions
(过
去分词做伴随动作), I prayed that our small gestures would bring them a semblance of
comfort and hope.
Several weeks later, the woman came to me, visibly different. Her face
brightened with a smile(无灵主语句) I hadn't seen before and her eyes, once tired and
strained(对比描写), now sparkled with appreciation(对比描写，过去分词做后置定语). She
acknowledged me profusely, holding(现在分词做伴随动作)her son
in her arms
, looking
much more at ease(现在分词做伴随动作). “Thank you! Your kindness has given me strength
to keep going,” her voice trembled(无灵主语句). She told me that with the help of the
community, she would be offered a part-time job. Her joy and relief were
so
genuine
that
it touched me deeply
. Observing the positive transformation in
her(现在分词短语做主语) bestowed upon me a sense of gratification and intensified my
belief that a small act of compassion could reignite a broken spirit(同为语从句).
